did you hear the children in the lawn. did you?
hear the children in the lawn. now, go to them, now...
why are children in the lawn? why? why? no, i said
why. answer them with a response, don't forget...
i was but a silenced nephew. i was, but
i is also much more. is was taken too.
when we were babes, then. when we
heard away the lawned men...
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there's a sense of narrative, but there isn't really. so then is it expository? sort of? since there isn't much information to glean, i have to turn to pleasure from the words, but there's so much repetition of the same words, i don't feel like i get much.
but i do like "is was taken too" and am strangely attracted to "heard away the lawned men".
thanks.
For me this poem is too aggressive to start. The imperative "go to them, now" is like being shoved off of my feet into the lawn. The rest of it I feel like I'm kicking frantically for no reason. The end is strong, but has no place. Lyrics with so much repetition depend on movement that gives each repetition a newness. The "narrative" needs a jumpstart.
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